Continues with the start of chapter 15
I think I might need help again. I'm still not entirely happy with this bit - I never really am, am I, with the heavy, soul-searchy bits of major angst? ::G:: Anything you think should be changed / cut / expounded on / better explained - whatever... please feel free to lay into this chapter in whatever way you feel best.
My esteemed co-writer alibongo
says - and I hope she won't mind if I quote; "the sun/stars bit is a tad over smarmed perhaps, but as per story it works."
Is it? Over smarmed?? Can
a story be over smarmed??? ::is full of doubt and question marks::
Any advice appreciated. Thanking you all in advance. As soon as I can get this bit done to my satisfaction, I can move on to poor Simon's bit of angst. Ah, that poor man. He's waited so
long to redeem himself. (o:
Man. I'm struggling with a mad internet connection today! One minute it's working better than ever; the next, not at all. It's been like this since last night - the only place I can consistently get on is up here in the spare room, sitting right next to the router. So, if you don't hear from me for some reason, it's not cos I'm ignoring you, I'm just not logged on for a bit. I'm really, really
hoping we can get this fixed soon cos it's driving me NUTS!!!